Pitch Feedback

 Feedback from Peers:

Overall, feedback was highly positive, which was especially true for intertextual references. 

• One piece of feedback flagged up the possibility that the number of intertextual references I wish to include may be too many. While this could be true, a lot of my intertextual references are somewhat similar to each other, such as The Eras Tour 'Tolerate It' and Next To Normal. Therefore I believe it will work, however will keep in mind the feedback and ensure that the references don't appear forced. 
• Another suggestion was to ensure there is a clear link to the target audience, which could be through the website. I will make sure to do this through the merchandise and easter eggs throughout the pages. 

Teacher Feedback:

Music Video: Labour the Cacophony.

• Really good presentation, demonstrates high level of understanding of the codes and conventions. 
• Love the Last Dinner Party feminist vibes.
• Mood board evokes the ideas effectively.
• good to see you have considered lots of intertextuality-love the newspaper idea- look at Swifts reputation.
• great that you have access to Salem- love that you are going to bring your cloak to US!
• Great song. Sounds like there are a lot of people sing in this, any chance of a choir scene? I am thinking Greek chorus vibes?
• excellent understanding of web conventions. 
• 30 seconds- behind the scenes- interview around Salem- witches were the first feminists etc?

Key Takeaways:

• I originally didn't look at Swift's Reputation era because a lot of the songs are centered around love, however I could look at the 'Look What You Made Me Do' music video. 
• I was planning to include a group scene, with intertextual references to 'Anne With An E', however failed to express this during my pitch. My plan is to have a group of girls who have found each other, communally realising that what they lived through is wrong and they need to reform the system.
• For my 30 second audio-visual, I really like the idea of a tour around Salem as part of the filming locations. It would be really interesting to give a short explanation as to why references were made to witch trials in the music video and why it's still relevant today (feminists are still punished in the world, just as witches were).